Mon Brézil in Paris - feb 2019

You have some very strong work in your submission. I've enjoyed viewing your artwork as it is quite varied in approach. Some of your images are rather representational, or others are a bit more esoteric and lyrical in approach. Images three and two are perhaps your most successful submissions. In image three, I'm very much drawn to the implied lines formed by the foot and the flowers which lead the eyes directly to the burning candle. In addition, the biblical depiction below of course references culture and ways of attempting to negotiate spirituality and eternity. This is a beautiful image. In image two, there is an engaging sense of symmetrical balance introduced by the dark shapes that occupy the left and right sides of the frame, and these shapes are variously echoed as well. I also applaud the rather subtle degree of color contrast afforded by the warmer hues near the middle of the picture with the cooler hues of the margins. Image four offers a great deal of promise, and I particularly enjoy the backlit effect and the gradient of hues in the middle branches. That being said, the central subject placement entails that the left and right sides of the framer are void of emphasis. Consider a different approach to composition, or more simply, perhaps a vertical orientation. These are your most engaging pictures. Image one offers promise, but I find the inclusion of the shadow elements at right and bottom left to be distracting. Perhaps you intend this as a sort of framing device, but this is not clear given the information provided in the picture, the image title nor the caption. Image five is perhaps your least successful picture. You already have one image which is far more successful in depicting lens flare via photographing directly into the sun. In addition, the right side of the frame is relatively inactive and this results in compositional imbalance. I applaud your project statement, but I suggest you reconsider your words. It is often difficult to pair rather lyrical and ambiguous imagery with similarly lyrical language. I suggest you be as concrete and specific as possible. What do you hope viewers might glean from your work, for example? I also suggest you be as specific as possible as you employ many general statements. As a matter of fact, in the project statement you refer to the reconnection of "everything," and the caption for image three references also a wide-ranging "everything." Be wary of trying to assign too large of a scope to your project. Be more specific and focused when possible. That being said, I applaud in your statement that you reference a personal trip to Luz, if I understand correctly. But what exactly is the connection to this event and the larger arc of your pictures? Usually, the more information that is provided to viewers, the greater the chance that they will arrive at a more fully realized appreciation of your vision. Your overall vision is interesting, particularly as embodied in images two and three. I suggest you refine your statement and consider a bit more continuity in style and aesthetics across the images. Thank you for submitting your work to LensCulture.